
The Fumbling Adventures of Fred
By Storybird

31 Jul, 2023

Once upon a time, there lived a prince named Fredrick who lived in the realm of the ridiculously predictable, a place where the plot was so thin it could give the Silver Surfer a run for his money.

Now this prince was meant to be the hero of our tale but frankly, every action he took was so blindingly obvious that it was hard not to roll my eyes. He was brave, sure, but he also had about as much depth as a puddle.

Speaking of puddles, let’s not forget the love interest, the princess named Serene who was only slightly less annoying than listening to a recording of nails on a chalkboard. I suppose her name was meant to be ironic because you would have never guessed that.

That brings us to the villain of the story, the evil sorcerer Drakus. A character so stereotypically sinister, his moustache twirling could have generated enough electricity to power a small town.

Fredrick's mission, much to my chagrin, was to rescue Princess Serene from the clutches of Drakus. I don’t know who decided that’s a good twist because it just seemed like an excuse for Fredrick to show off his biceps.

While our ‘hero’ galloped off to the sorcerer's castle, Serene sat in her tower singing her woes. And let me tell you, her singing was like listening to a walrus play the bagpipes, it wasn't pleasant.

Meanwhile, Drakus, the villain of the piece, spent his time cackling in a corner. Now I’m not sure about you, but when I think villain, I like a little more than just evil laughter.

Somewhere around chapter five, Fredrick battled a dragon. Now, if it was me, I'd use the dragon to get rid of Fredrick, but Drakus missed that trick, probably too busy twirling his moustache.

Fredrick's journey was conveniently straightforward, a straight line from point A to point B. It's almost like someone was holding his hand and guiding him every step of the way.

Of course, Fredrick managed to defeat the dragon, and don’t ask me how, I think we all knew it was going to happen anyway. Got to keep the plot rolling, even if it feels like pushing a boulder uphill.

Finally, we get to the 'grand' confrontation between our so-called hero and our moustache-twirling villain. Sadly, it was about as thrilling as watching paint dry.

There was a lot of 'you'll never win' and 'true love will triumph'. And guess what? In one glorious cliché of a moment, Fredrick did triumph. The villain was defeated, and the day was saved.

Major shocker there? Not really. And to top it all off, Fredrick and Serene shared a big 'romantic' kiss. I say romantic, but it was more cringe-inducing than anything.

And they lived happily ever after. Or at least, that's what we're told. Though honestly speaking, I won't be surprised if Fredrick ends up rescuing Serene again from some other two-dimensional villain.

In the end, I can say that the plot was as thin as vapor and the characters were about as interesting as cardboard cutouts. Just another tale of damsels and dragons, with nothing much to spare.

Perhaps the most interesting part of this tale was when I realized it was over. Freedom from the painfully predictable plot, the shallow characters, and a truly uninspiring narrative.

I don't know about you, but I would rather read a menu from a fast food joint than go through another chapter of this snoozefest. At least the menu has some sort of variety.

Prince Fredrick, Princess Serene, and the villain Drakus hold absolutely no surprises for the reader. The plot was spoon-fed, a sad reflection of the lack of creativity.

I have seen more depth in a sketch of a circle than in the characters that graced this story. The predictability and the lack of substance was dreary indeed.

In the end, the story of Fredrick and Serene left me with the feeling of chewing a tasteless gum for too long, and just like the gum, this story had lost its flavor somewhere in the beginning.

All in all, I do hope that the next tale I chance upon holds more promise than this one. Perhaps one where the characters are not just the epitome of clichés and the plot doesn't make me yawn.

For now, let's close the chapter on this banal affair and look forward to a story worth telling. One that holds mystery, depth, and characters that are more than just shadows on a page.

So here's to better narratives, intriguing plots, and characters that surprise us. The kind that keeps you turning the pages and leaves you with a sense of satisfaction at the end.

As for Fredrick, Serene, and Drakus, well, let's just say they can remain in the realm of the ridiculously predictable where they belong, serving as a reminder of how not to tell a story.

And thus I bid you farewell, in hopes of storytelling adventures that keep the essence of the tale alive and keeps us immersed, leaving no room for a ranting narrator like me.